Dear Lois,
The beginning of the book is sensational! Your book isn’t like regular books where the beginning starts off to be a dull and boring. You actually capture your readers’ minds to imagine the different sort of world they live in. My personal feeling about the first five chapters is the comparing and contrasting about the two different worlds. How they have differences with feelings, jobs, and everything else. This book is great when you see the insides of the book that the characters try and make this as perfect as it can be. I have no rejection how the book should have been done differently....yet.
I like your foreshadow.... :o) Watch your sentence structure - a few sentences read a little funny or are incomplete.
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